For free this week I chose to write about a wedding that just happened in the weekend and it was a very enjoyable moment with my family.
The Wedding
On Saturday morning we woke up early to get ready to go to my cousins wedding. My cousins wedding started at 2 "o" clock, and we went into the church around 1:30. While we were in the church everybody was waiting patiently until we were in there to long and the bride accidentally came late. The bridal ended up getting there around 3:45 so throughout the time she wasn't there everybody was just talking and catching up with everyone. When the girls arrived ( the bridesmaids,bride,flower girl ) everybody made there way inside sat down quietly shifted the chairs back the right way and waited for the ceremony to start. The ceremony started everybody stood up, and the bride made her way to her husband. As the bride walked up some started crying with joyful tears, and everybody was whispering how beautiful she looked. The bride looked so stunning everybody couldn't wait to take picture with her as well as her husband. The husband looked handsome and they were just so happy as usual and were really excited to take some photos with the whanau. After the photos and ceremony everybody made there way to the marae to have speeches and a feed. While we were eating there were speeches going on after my family finished eating my cousin done a speech and we all done the haka.
Wow, that was a long wait for the bride to turn up! Sounds like a beautiful wedding though. Next time try to add some descriptive language to your writing to help put a picture in the reader's mind. What can you see, feel, smell, taste, hear etc. Try using some figurative language like similes or metaphors. Great work though :)
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